Wednesday, May 23, 2012

MAN AND MACHINE...A THIN LINE.


I wish I could see
How he was working on me...
No pain...numbed, just some tugs
Cannot see, he has me covered
Thinks I am weak hearted,
Only if he knew :P
Whirrrr goes the drill
Holes for the screws
Then the hammering
I am bored.
A jet of water
Clears the mess
As he admires his handiwork
A master surgeon he sews up with flair
Sealing my fracture and fate!!


For - dVerse ~ OpenLinkNight
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24 comments:

  1. The PoetMay 23, 2012 at 11:42 AM

    My precious Janaki,
    I always smile when reading your work. Personally, I could never come up with thoughts like that. I really love the way you create these gems with such taste and flavor. I just love the ending!!!

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    1. JANUMay 23, 2012 at 5:50 PM

      Andy...can I ever come up with thoughts like yours? You are too good in your craft. Thanks a ton.

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  2. KritiMay 23, 2012 at 12:19 PM

    Very nicely done - a craftsman at work on his masterpiece : )

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  3. Brian MillerMay 23, 2012 at 4:18 PM

    shivers...anyone that needs to change us that much, if it really love? there is some nice tension in this one...

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  4. Alpana JaiswalMay 23, 2012 at 8:32 PM

    After a long time Janu,missed your innovative ideas...good one!

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  5. Myrna R.May 23, 2012 at 8:52 PM

    Ouch. This one has some pain. Really well written. Enjoyed much.

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  6. Galen PearlMay 23, 2012 at 9:15 PM

    I could feel it! Very vivid images.

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  7. AnonymousMay 23, 2012 at 9:24 PM

    very crafty! nice read.
    -Portia

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  8. Nikky44May 23, 2012 at 10:22 PM

    Ouch! :(

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  9. Amy @mommetimeMay 24, 2012 at 6:06 AM

    she seems indifferent to the pain... as if disinclined to exert any effort or allow her feelings to be known. good read!

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  10. AnkithaMay 25, 2012 at 1:36 AM

    Janaki:-):-)
    I must appreciate every word put thr.
    I love it.
    I love it even more from "A jet of water clears the mess.. Til d end "
    Wat beauty i must appreciate.

    I Hav not been blogging these days.
    But now m bak.
    I wud b glad to c u connected to my blog.:-)
    Takecare.

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  11. gautami tripathyMay 25, 2012 at 10:24 PM

    Good writing...!!

    cloud reader

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  12. Mary Hudak-Collins livingthescripture.comMay 26, 2012 at 2:28 AM

    Whoa Janaki, that to me was a very powerful poem! Thank you for sharing. Your words in this one gave me a very vivid image.

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  13. IreneMay 26, 2012 at 3:33 AM

    WOW, this is superb, Janaki!!! Love it! :-)

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  14. ClaudiaMay 27, 2012 at 1:28 PM

    i think it's a thin line indeed...in the end it's love that will change us and iron sharps iron...think it's always a dual process...

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  15. HemaMay 28, 2012 at 1:22 PM

    Great Janaki! you made that sound so simple :). Loved the last line!!

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