I wait to feel the pull
My heart drums in my chest
Red velvet chairs
My red dress
Purse on lap
Shoes glistening
Underworld of fabulous sounds
Atmosphere is magical
Buzzing with excitement
Its an appropriate time to enter.
He closes his eyes
Takes deep breaths
"Which way to go?"
"Which way to go?"
Beside me is an empty seat
I turn around once more
My heart skips a beat
The door beside me opens.
This was written for dVerse - Erasure poetry.
Due to ill health, could not post it on time.
Erasure poetry is a form of found poetry created
by erasing words from an existing text in prose or verse and framing
the result on the page as a poem. The results can be allowed to stand in situ or
they can be arranged into lines and/or stanzas.
I have chosen my text from Cecelia Ahern's novel -
Thanks for the memories.
the wait is rewarded...i hope it is the right person....smiles....i like how you give both perspectives...and his concern over the right time to enter is cute...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton Brian.
DeleteVery well done...I like the last stanza especially, with the door opening! I see good things on the other side of the door.
ReplyDelete:)thanks Mary.
DeleteWow, this was sweet and really interesting. I am a dummy when it comes to poetry but I know what I like. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Leah.
Deletehis nervousness exudes care.
ReplyDelete+To Me It Matters+
Thanks Aprad.
DeleteAww...I hope it led to love... (ever the romantic) You build the tension in this so well. GReat erasure.
ReplyDeleteI hope you're feeling a bit better today Janu :0
Thanks...am much better today.
DeleteNicely done--I like the mysterious ending, leaving us guessing how this ended.
ReplyDeleteOh, you paint such an atmosphere of beautiful, romantic anticipation. I don't know the book but I enjoyed what you did here. Thanks so much for joining us!
ReplyDeleteThank you Anna.
DeletePretty nice and I had no clue about this type of poetry.
ReplyDeleteThis is my first attempt Rachna...thanks.
Deleteah this is lovely...both seem to be prepared to finally meet...this i call destiny...nice
ReplyDeleteThanks Claudia.
Deletedear Janu, you really are into poetry!
ReplyDelete-Poet Desh
brilliant .. destiny is greattttttttttttt and good things happen to those who wait ...
ReplyDeleteBikram's
Cute. Sounds like an opening night and someone has a crush :)
ReplyDeleteI wish I could write poetry as well as you.
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