Sunday, April 15, 2012

PHENOMENON






One step forward, two steps back
Too many words stuck in the heart
Clock ticking by fast....lost track
unexplained pain pierces like dart.


Was it a pollen that got embedded?
Or was it a seed that was planted?
Like a weed it grew and me it shredded
Gripped my soul, had me enchanted.


It has me shackled, can't shake it off
Try I might, the noose tightens more
Controlling my senses in a swift quaff
The feeling is something I cannot ignore.


So many reasons to break free
So many more reasons to hold on to thee.


For- NaPoWriMo


This is my attempt at writing sonnet...followed the Shakespearean Sonnet form...the rhyme scheme of a,b,a,b,c,d,c,d,e,f,e,f,g,g...iambic pentameter...don't know about it.
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17 comments:

  1. sulekkhaApril 15, 2012 at 10:39 PM

    Enchante' Janaki...beautiful

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  2. JANUApril 15, 2012 at 10:41 PM

    Thanks Sulekha.

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  3. Jessica MApril 15, 2012 at 10:47 PM

    Beautiful! Being in love has is beautiful but also comes with bondage (emotional attachment) as well.

    Here's mine: http://ascendingthehills.blogspot.com/2012/04/napowrimo-broken-dawn.html

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  4. RavenmythApril 15, 2012 at 10:55 PM

    I love your phrase...one step forward, two steps back...creating a visual of life being lived...time moving on and our daily existance being assailed by the ups and downs...feeling it to the core of your being...

    I love how you ended the poem...So many reasons to break free...so many more reasons to hold on to thee...I loved the rhythm within your words...not unlike a heartbeat...beautifully written...

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  5. UnknownApril 16, 2012 at 12:31 AM

    Just loved it Janu, esp the last two lines...loved the feel in it...the true life...

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  6. Anshul GautamApril 16, 2012 at 12:38 AM

    Lovely creation...A perfect sonnet I would say. :)

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  7. Martha Jane OrlandoApril 16, 2012 at 12:43 AM

    Ah, the tension of pulling free or clinging onto something is so beautifully expressed here, Janaki. Well done! Blessings!

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  8. AnonymousApril 16, 2012 at 6:14 AM

    Great job with the sonnet, Janaki! <3

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  9. Rachel HoytApril 16, 2012 at 10:58 AM

    I'm no judge of meter but I loved this rhyme! Pollen planted is so poignant. Great write.

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  10. The PoetApril 16, 2012 at 8:33 PM

    Dear Janu,
    Nice imagery and flow. Well done!

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  11. Manisha BhatiaApril 17, 2012 at 10:31 AM

    I just loved this one...explains me as I am these days....

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  12. Mary Hudak-Collins livingthescripture.comApril 19, 2012 at 5:09 PM

    Your first line is one that I feel I live every waking moment of my day! But how you ended your poem is perfect...always making choices in life, sometimes with ambivalence. Thanks for sharing!

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